Evaluation

Final Film: Surf School

New Storyboard

New Script

INT. SURF SHOP

Audiences watch the scene from the point of view of the unknown CHARACTER. CHARACTER walks into a surf shop.

(NARRATION) PETE ABELL

Okay, I remember hiring my first board at Polzeath and going out chest air quarter and I probably rode the wave for about 10 seconds but it felt like 5 minutes. It was one of them, that was the moment.

CHARACTER begins browsing the surfboards.

(NARRATION) PETE ABELL

There’s so much about the surfing that I love. One, the fitness element, you just feel really fit and healthy. Two is the social element. I’ve met so many people doing it.

CHARACTER appears in another shop and browses the wetsuits and surfboards.

(NARRATION) PETE ABELL

I love being a surf instructor. It would be the honest truth to say I get up in the morning everyday, and I'm never upset about my job.

INT. SURFBOARD SHAPERS

Surfboard shaper NIGEL uses stencils on a surfboard and begins by sanding down the edges. NIGEL then saws off the edges and starts shaping the top of the board.

CUT

EXT. WATERGATE BAY

Unknown character surfs a wave down at the beach.

CUT

INT. SURFBOARD SHAPERS

NIGEL starts layering the resin on the board.

CUT

EXT. WATERGATE BAY

Another clip of a pro surfer surfing some waves at the beach.

CUT

INT. SURFBOARD SHAPERS

NIGEL continuing to layer the resin on the board.

CUT

EXT. WATERGATE BAY

Again another surfer is shown surfing a new wave.

(NARRATION) YOUNG PETE

 I think I was fourteen and Pete taught me to surf. He was responsible for all this. (laughs)

Surfer falls off board.

END

New Shot List

After receiving lots of audience feedback and thoroughly watching our film back, Sam and I came to the mutual decision to go out for a few more shoots down at Watergate Bay, King's Surf School and Ocean Magic Surf Factory. Our audience felt we lacked variation in terms of media language, and we wanted to ensure that our target audience are fully satisfied with the end result and that our film stays interesting and varied. We agreed to keep some of the original footage from the surf shop as it remains relevant to the genre and works effectively for an opening by representing our target audience and the use of a POV shot really brings audiences in as they can feel a part of the scene.

For this I then had to draw up a new shot list: 

*(shot #10 is meant to be a MCU)

Second Draft